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Alanray64
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It’s hard to give this novel a fair assessment as it is obviously from a non speaking English writer. My criticism is that the author took no pains to seek a proofreader to assist him with this and instead relied on translated words which as we all know, does not give a fair result. A comment about his use of the word retard was used instead of regressed and his explanation was the translation had it as that. I found this novel a little to far fetched, more a wish fantasy if anything, everything just gets handed to him on a silver plate. I felt no connection to the Mc and in fact found him to be tiresome and to childish to take seriously. The novel appeared initially interesting however after trying to follow the story and combined with the terrible sentences/grammar, it died a quick death in my mind. Only advice to give is as mentioned before, proofreading is urgently required and then check again. Just wasn’t worth the time.

System: Daily login!!, jackpot on the first day!!!

Sug_Madic_xx2

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Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2AuthorSug_Madic_xx2

actually, I have, just now, rewritten chap 7- 10, I don't know if is still bad or not, but if you still have some time, and you still have the mood to read it, please read it.

Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2AuthorSug_Madic_xx2

not rewrite actually, just fix some Grammar

Sim_Um
Sim_UmLv14Sim_Um

is this harem? I hate harem so I need to know

Sug_Madic_xx2:actually, I have, just now, rewritten chap 7- 10, I don't know if is still bad or not, but if you still have some time, and you still have the mood to read it, please read it.
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Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2AuthorSug_Madic_xx2

i'm sorry bro.

Sim_Um:is this harem? I hate harem so I need to know
Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2AuthorSug_Madic_xx2

it's not big, maybe just 3 or 4, he needs it

Sim_Um:is this harem? I hate harem so I need to know
Sim_Um
Sim_UmLv14Sim_Um

Thank you for the answer.