Review Detail of xpired_sin in Stuck in an Island with Twelve Beautiful Women
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I am only basing this off the six chaps available for free. Honestly, seems unrealistic and contrived. Using all his strength during cpr is a way to break ribs. If he’s that tired after rescuing 2-3 people… he’s not going out for #12 using determination… he would of drowned. Repeated use of his feelings/situation just becomes redundant and makes me want to skip paragraphs which means I might miss things. Also, he is stuck on an island. Being stuck in an island makes me picture the guy being buried neck deep in sand never to be let out. The story may get better, but not worth putting my passes into from the small portion unlocked.
Stuck in an Island with Twelve Beautiful Women
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It's all a personal choice to continue reading or not, okay now to the other things first about the CPR, he was just tired, that's right. he had to save 20 people that day. second about the feelings, sometimes people need to know clearly how the charecter feels just to feel it realistic. expressing it more than one time maks people feel it inside their mind. and for the third, why I named it - stuck 'in' well that's a secret i hope to reveal only in the end. any ways thank you for the honest review and support. please keep reading other works and enjoy them, even if you don't feel like continuing my work, you will find more stories which might interest you. take care [img=recommend]