Review Detail of novelmeister in The Duke's Youngest Son is a Regressor
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To start, congratulations author for releasing this novel on the platform. Although this novel is for a monthly contest and is one of your first works, it is severely lacking. I am an honest reviewer and will not inflate stars on a review simply for your benefit, and to tell it how it is - this story has many grammatical errors, there is much lacking in the exposition department, and the pace is too fast for any emotional connection between readers and this story. For further clarification, we get a 1-page backstory that Cassius basically died as a failure, got reborn, and is now powerful. This writing system leaves much to be desired and is meant only for eye-candy, a story someone will read to pass time. You may argue that this story has only been out for a short while and grammatical issues would be present because of that; the problem for me is that the author decided to publish these chapters, and once a chapter is published-it’s final. I’m only reviewing what is put in front of me, and what is currently there is lacking. I will only change my review if you edit your story, author. If you have any questions about my review, whether you’re the author themselves or a reader, please ask in the comments. I’ll respond honestly without bias. Have a good day! 😀
The Duke's Youngest Son is a Regressor
Rerian
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oh ok, I agree. When I originally wrote this novel I didn't know about POV and simply followed the way the only novel I had read at the time structured it which was the third POV for the first chap and the first POV present for the rest then I realized I could switch to the third pov even after the first chapter so I did but I couldn't edit the chapters in the middle because they didn't fit well in third pov. there was simply too much internal monologue.
novelmeister:It’s just an avenue of expression that essentially means writing style. For example, if I say the writing system you’re using on a novel is bad it means your style is bad. Just another way to say style, no hidden intentions
And yes. I am aware this is a web novel and not a published work by an accredited author. I know that new authors make mistakes. I am not comparing this novel to a light novel that has been professionally written and edited, I am comparing it to a good standard novel on this platform, no other platforms or entities.
Thank you for your review :) I agree with you tbh. I've been asking people about those exact problems but everyone kept telling me that it wasn't that bad and it only made me more anxious. I'm happy to see someone else finally agree with me on the problems in this novel 😁 this may sound strange, but this is my favorite review I've received.
Hmm yes of course, I’ll explain. The reason why this story is fast paced to me is because we aren’t introduced to the mains’ background story at all, other than a description on how he was abused by his family in his past life and became awakened by himself. The way you introduced it was like an afterthought, by saying “and he died because of his brother, after accomplishing a great goal of awakening by himself.” More story should be written on his backstory to make the main character becoming powerful in his second life even sweeter and more satisfying. At least for me, I dislike when an author hastily writes little background on the main character before he acquires whatever makes him powerful (whether that be an artifact, regression, a person, an event , or an entity), by introducing it in such a manner, it is not as satisfying as it should be. For example if you had about 20 chapters of the mains life before he died, and then went into regression after, it would be extremely satisfying seeing the main character take revenge on his family and acquire power more so than it would be like it is now.
Rerian:I'm a little confused about the part of it being fast paced tho. I was told that it was actually a little slow paced. like it's still within 40 hours from his regression at the current chap, and he didn't even awaken until chapter 10.
If this explanation is too confusing to understand, think of it like solo leveling. The build up to his eventual demise and acquisition of the system was calculated perfectly and made readers emotionally connect to it, because Jinwoo went from being at the bottom rung of society which was written perfectly to becoming the most powerful, over a gradual period of time. Your story basically does this except it’s done in 20 chapters and not 100.
novelmeister:Hmm yes of course, I’ll explain. The reason why this story is fast paced to me is because we aren’t introduced to the mains’ background story at all, other than a description on how he was abused by his family in his past life and became awakened by himself. The way you introduced it was like an afterthought, by saying “and he died because of his brother, after accomplishing a great goal of awakening by himself.” More story should be written on his backstory to make the main character becoming powerful in his second life even sweeter and more satisfying. At least for me, I dislike when an author hastily writes little background on the main character before he acquires whatever makes him powerful (whether that be an artifact, regression, a person, an event , or an entity), by introducing it in such a manner, it is not as satisfying as it should be. For example if you had about 20 chapters of the mains life before he died, and then went into regression after, it would be extremely satisfying seeing the main character take revenge on his family and acquire power more so than it would be like it is now.
hmm, you have a good point. But I didn't want to info dump or start off too slowly. I did have a few flash back chapters planned out though.
novelmeister:Hmm yes of course, I’ll explain. The reason why this story is fast paced to me is because we aren’t introduced to the mains’ background story at all, other than a description on how he was abused by his family in his past life and became awakened by himself. The way you introduced it was like an afterthought, by saying “and he died because of his brother, after accomplishing a great goal of awakening by himself.” More story should be written on his backstory to make the main character becoming powerful in his second life even sweeter and more satisfying. At least for me, I dislike when an author hastily writes little background on the main character before he acquires whatever makes him powerful (whether that be an artifact, regression, a person, an event , or an entity), by introducing it in such a manner, it is not as satisfying as it should be. For example if you had about 20 chapters of the mains life before he died, and then went into regression after, it would be extremely satisfying seeing the main character take revenge on his family and acquire power more so than it would be like it is now.
There isn’t a need to info dump, either. Instead of just crowding the prologue with information and inconsequential character scenes there should be one major event like the main at the Blackwood trial for example, displaying all character interactions (ex “Nathan’s mother glared at him, deceptively. She knows she is the cause for his demise, but doesn’t care.” By expanding characters like this before the main arc starts readers would be more satisfied seeing the plans of Nathan’s mother not go correctly when the main awakens a system
Rerian:hmm, you have a good point. But I didn't want to info dump or start off too slowly. I did have a few flash back chapters planned out though.
It’s just an avenue of expression that essentially means writing style. For example, if I say the writing system you’re using on a novel is bad it means your style is bad. Just another way to say style, no hidden intentions
Rerian:Also, what's a writing system?
novelmeister:Hmm yes of course, I’ll explain. The reason why this story is fast paced to me is because we aren’t introduced to the mains’ background story at all, other than a description on how he was abused by his family in his past life and became awakened by himself. The way you introduced it was like an afterthought, by saying “and he died because of his brother, after accomplishing a great goal of awakening by himself.” More story should be written on his backstory to make the main character becoming powerful in his second life even sweeter and more satisfying. At least for me, I dislike when an author hastily writes little background on the main character before he acquires whatever makes him powerful (whether that be an artifact, regression, a person, an event , or an entity), by introducing it in such a manner, it is not as satisfying as it should be. For example if you had about 20 chapters of the mains life before he died, and then went into regression after, it would be extremely satisfying seeing the main character take revenge on his family and acquire power more so than it would be like it is now.