Review Detail of Luizz_Ricardo in The Enlightened One (Senju!SI)
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I love naruto fanfics but I couldn't read this one, first point and that the MC has a weak mentality, second point and that everything good about him came from the senju lineage, the guy only really started training when he saw that he had mokuton, third point and that the MC has no charisma or personality he would simply be ordinary if it weren't for mokuton, this is the type of MC that if he wasn't born special he would never become special
The Enlightened One (Senju!SI)
Kakukami
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I liked you author, you know how to receive criticism and respond calmly, normally on this site the first moment someone says something that the author doesn't agree with he simply responds with "You don't like it, don't read it" Or something along those lines. Now, what's important... Can we expect our dear MC to meet some quality MILFs? As someone reincarnated with a mentality above their real age and in a non-modern world, I believe it is a perfectly valid question.
I agree. The MC doesn't feel compelling and acts and thinks like some generic isekai. He isn't really that smart nor does he really have any true motive out of his own genuine will. He isn't special and is quite frankly a shallow and obtuse person who is trying to be something greater than what he actually works or deserves to be.
I'd like to add a few points here that may have been misunderstood. Firstly, the MC not training before discovering his lineage. Danzo is a very real threat in the village that is known for yoinking people as he pleases, mainly those of unimportant standing within the village like orphans. This is a canon thing and not something I've just decided to add to my fic. With his level of intelligence, becoming a genius would be easy, but he'd draw the attention of Danzo who does in fact have eyes within the orphanage. Secondly, the MC has a weak mentality. I'm not gonna lie to you, I can see where this thought stems from, but honestly if anyone else was put in his situation, would they not have a similar reaction? Imagine becoming a slave for a man who's only use for you is your skills, and the moment you prove yourself out of use, he'd cast you aside. That's without mentioning how he doesn't allow anyone to divulge village secrets. I thank you for checking out the fic, and leaving a review, it does mean a lot, even if it wasn't your cup of tea.
Although I criticized your fanfic it wasn't out of malice, I hope you continue writing because I love the power of Mokuton and wise body
Kakukami:I'd like to add a few points here that may have been misunderstood. Firstly, the MC not training before discovering his lineage. Danzo is a very real threat in the village that is known for yoinking people as he pleases, mainly those of unimportant standing within the village like orphans. This is a canon thing and not something I've just decided to add to my fic. With his level of intelligence, becoming a genius would be easy, but he'd draw the attention of Danzo who does in fact have eyes within the orphanage. Secondly, the MC has a weak mentality. I'm not gonna lie to you, I can see where this thought stems from, but honestly if anyone else was put in his situation, would they not have a similar reaction? Imagine becoming a slave for a man who's only use for you is your skills, and the moment you prove yourself out of use, he'd cast you aside. That's without mentioning how he doesn't allow anyone to divulge village secrets. I thank you for checking out the fic, and leaving a review, it does mean a lot, even if it wasn't your cup of tea.
