Review Detail of NitrogenousBeing in Greatest Legacy of the Magus Universe

This is a critique with high standards because, after 34 chapters, I still can’t say that it hooked me or even that I’ve enjoyed it. But it's not bad. I want to like it because there are signs the story may be a late bloomer. Grammar: Good minus some commas and high-level stuff Writing Style/Sentance Structure: Dabbler - Beyond amateur level, but still not yet professional level. Immersiveness could be improved through additional colorful descriptions and more concise/direct phrasing of actions. (good for high-speed writing with no editor) Narrative: Okay. It's stiff and standard. There are a couple of minor holes in the logic. The writing style also takes some of the impact away here. Characters: Meh. They are mostly flat, generic, and lack background. There are too few reasons to like the MC. They need more drama and it needs to be believable. Plot: Unoriginal. Many events are generic, dull, and bland. It lacks compelling events, conflicts, and dilemmas. But it's still early and there’s a lot of room to run from here. Prolog: Wow, someone did it right! (a rare feat on this website). Good job! Overall: B- letter grade. Considering it is a web novel and theoretically written at a sprint for a contest, it’s decent. I hope the story improves and blooms to become like a beautiful lotus. Please improve and develop it so I can re-review it with a higher score.