Review Detail of SlowWittedSong in Rise of the Immortal Black Dragon King

The story is clearly not up to par. 1. The main character is a creepy adult who communicates with 6-year-old girls in the body of a little boy. 2. The author is seriously trying to build some kind of relationship between 6-year-old children. yes, I know this is an anime world, but still 3. you give too much power and the hero’s merits are not felt 4. The system is poorly made; there are too many features for practically nothing. (that's all I can articulate for now of the shortcomings of my three-hour charity). tip of the day! (night?) When writing a story based on a manga-style light novel, follow the conventions of the genre; they do not exist in this form. if you want to make a harem right, let the relationship develop gradually as you grow older, otherwise it will turn out that a pedophile in a child’s body is molesting children (that’s creepy haha) don't give your characters too much power, there were enough vritras in this story and a system whose goal was to elevate the main character to the rank of the strongest dragon, this already sounds more interesting. and finally create your own plot parallel to the main light novel thread in the manga or anime, the dxd world is very big and even the best fanfictions don't touch on parts of what could be written about, and now peace to you people, I'm going to bed 😴 p.s. the translator does not convey the meaning well xD