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All rokushiki techniques are necessary to master “full control over the body (I don’t remember what the technique is called”), which is necessary to awaken the devil fruit. Kaido said that one must gain complete understanding and control of the body in order to awaken the fetus.
The story is clearly not up to par. 1. The main character is a creepy adult who communicates with 6-year-old girls in the body of a little boy. 2. The author is seriously trying to build some kind of relationship between 6-year-old children. yes, I know this is an anime world, but still 3. you give too much power and the hero’s merits are not felt 4. The system is poorly made; there are too many features for practically nothing. (that's all I can articulate for now of the shortcomings of my three-hour charity). tip of the day! (night?) When writing a story based on a manga-style light novel, follow the conventions of the genre; they do not exist in this form. if you want to make a harem right, let the relationship develop gradually as you grow older, otherwise it will turn out that a pedophile in a child’s body is molesting children (that’s creepy haha) don't give your characters too much power, there were enough vritras in this story and a system whose goal was to elevate the main character to the rank of the strongest dragon, this already sounds more interesting. and finally create your own plot parallel to the main light novel thread in the manga or anime, the dxd world is very big and even the best fanfictions don't touch on parts of what could be written about, and now peace to you people, I'm going to bed 😴 p.s. the translator does not convey the meaning well xD
awesome, I'm glad that a dxd work has appeared, the action of which, although it takes place next to the main plot, is held back by its narrative line. I hope you continue to write your work, developing the personalities and interactions of the characters you create. I'm glad you made gg fall without cowering