Overall a great approach. There are only 2 things i have to point out.1: Ther are many explanations that disrupt the flow of the story. Since this is a Fanfic there is no need to go into so much detail that most readers will skip anyway.2: It is quite slow paced. Again very detailed, but way too much in my opinion. Since this is pure training/learning until now it gets boring quite fast, at least for my expectation of a story in this world.Apart from those 2 points it is a great experience. Very good grammar, frequent updates and a very different MC compared to most FFs. Maybe you can do something about my critique, other than that keep up the good work
KK9494
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LIKEKK9494:Hey buddy, I took your review to heart and tried my best to change the format of the chapters in rewriting, just check it out once. Anyways, thanks for giving me a good review
KK9494:Hey buddy, I took your review to heart and tried my best to change the format of the chapters in rewriting, just check it out once. Anyways, thanks for giving me a good review