the dialogue is to long? to me it just sounds like ur lazy if u can't accept the fact that people talk a lot in the real world then u need to go and talk to more people outside instead of through a mic
Hezekiah_Lindsey:ahh sorry i was just texting you.the problems are mostly show dont tell which is literally so easy to fix. like read any book that shows u how to properly show and evoke description and the dialogue too it's too long and feels off ya gotta shorten it and make it more realistic. thats it. cold have been a really cool novel from it's concept
ahh sorry i was just texting you.the problems are mostly show dont tell which is literally so easy to fix. like read any book that shows u how to properly show and evoke description and the dialogue too it's too long and feels off ya gotta shorten it and make it more realistic. thats it. cold have been a really cool novel from it's concept
Whoa hold on buddy, I don't need to be cook to criticize food. You are coming on way too aggressively. And he's correct, if you know how to use internet, you can find history of this author deleting low rating comments and spewing hate comments on readers. Unless of course you are one of his alt's or his editor's ....
Dexter_Sled_1111:you should have given suggestions on how to improve the book. But instead... you call it bad and leave... can you write a novel?
Lord_Eggie:Whoa hold on buddy, I don't need to be cook to criticize food. You are coming on way too aggressively. And he's correct, if you know how to use internet, you can find history of this author deleting low rating comments and spewing hate comments on readers. Unless of course you are one of his alt's or his editor's ....
Lord_Eggie:Whoa hold on buddy, I don't need to be cook to criticize food. You are coming on way too aggressively. And he's correct, if you know how to use internet, you can find history of this author deleting low rating comments and spewing hate comments on readers. Unless of course you are one of his alt's or his editor's ....