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The writing quality of this was superb. Thr author has a very creative mind that consolidates his ideas. But all that are nothing if the story is not enjoyable. up to the chapter 169 there’re not much main characters development. Mc has many personas but there’s no main one since they keep changing and getting deleted. So it’s like reading the story with a whole new mc, then later he will be deleted and changed to another persona Up to the chapter I read i got no attachment to the main characters, mc can die and i will feel nothing. I gave it so many chance i read up to 169 chaps And there’s no much development to the story. I can’t imagine myself continuing it when there’s not much chapters remaining to catch up, and I dunno how many it would take to develop. And it’s frustrating that mc never make a good decisions on himself. He was just getting used from the beginning to the where i stopped.
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Yalatola
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You see when writing you have to take notes of several things(what will makes your readers stay and enjoy it) it doesn’t have to be only happy story or sad, you can blend. Not all side characters have to be hated(btw i hate all yours) You can make evil villains, write great story about them that will make us loves them and villains that are evil just for the sake of it. You see when the characters betray him It doesn’t have to be all of them Like how you portray freya she’s a great thinker or zuri who’s kinda obsessed with and wouldn’t mind staying with any version of him they shouldn’t be part of this betrayal Dean can betray him she’s stupid Eryl its not the first time Eris for the greater future Moonra and solaria are afraid of their mother But now when everyone betrays him, uses him Then now think they can’t handle this version of him they created And concluded it’s time to erase his memories again and start from the fresh. Rejected the idea he left then start to antagonising And again the characters band together to stop him And another persona appears with maybe is the real one and possibly recovers all his memories When it’s settled they got back again like nothing happens without any consequences of their since almost all of them are part of the harem( marie and lilith were there they uses him to kill, they should have done something) Then probably from then you will start introducing the sins. Believe me it will be hella boring and hard to read for most of us who almost catch up or caught up think just many more chapters will take to reach the climax If the introductory chapters took 5 to 7 volumes But believe me your way of creating complicated ideas is amazing But you sucks at creating character dynamics if you could work on that it will be amazing And I’m looking forward to your next novel in the future
Yalatola:thank you for your review, your experience through this story made me realize that my approach was problematic for what I was planning. the true plot of the book was for the mc to find who he really is, the thing about a true Dora and it begins from chapter 183 but I have to admit that it's probably too long. indeed the mc is meant to be antagonizing and turn against everyone while his true self will discover who he was and help everyone to stop him. I have no trouble spoiling it now because now i understand my flaws, the story is too complicated, thank you for making me understand that.
thank you for your review, your experience through this story made me realize that my approach was problematic for what I was planning. the true plot of the book was for the mc to find who he really is, the thing about a true Dora and it begins from chapter 183 but I have to admit that it's probably too long. indeed the mc is meant to be antagonizing and turn against everyone while his true self will discover who he was and help everyone to stop him. I have no trouble spoiling it now because now i understand my flaws, the story is too complicated, thank you for making me understand that.
i understand, the point you mentioned are correct, the point of the betrayal was that the one in control wasn't Dora but the sin, so erasing his memory the first time was wise, as for the second it was planned but when the mother will come this Dora would refuse. The story from this point will never be back to them together, the idea was that they would use him and he would awake in two side, one who would learn yo be the true Dora in a parallel world and the second who would turn against everyone after chapter 183 and everyone he killed would be revive in a sort of heaven where the good Dora is with Midgard and Elizabeth (reverberating to the evil Dora in making him believe that if he kill everyone he will save the world)
Chaos_lord_:You see when writing you have to take notes of several things(what will makes your readers stay and enjoy it) it doesn’t have to be only happy story or sad, you can blend. Not all side characters have to be hated(btw i hate all yours) You can make evil villains, write great story about them that will make us loves them and villains that are evil just for the sake of it. You see when the characters betray him It doesn’t have to be all of them Like how you portray freya she’s a great thinker or zuri who’s kinda obsessed with and wouldn’t mind staying with any version of him they shouldn’t be part of this betrayal Dean can betray him she’s stupid Eryl its not the first time Eris for the greater future Moonra and solaria are afraid of their mother But now when everyone betrays him, uses him Then now think they can’t handle this version of him they created And concluded it’s time to erase his memories again and start from the fresh. Rejected the idea he left then start to antagonising And again the characters band together to stop him And another persona appears with maybe is the real one and possibly recovers all his memories When it’s settled they got back again like nothing happens without any consequences of their since almost all of them are part of the harem( marie and lilith were there they uses him to kill, they should have done something) Then probably from then you will start introducing the sins. Believe me it will be hella boring and hard to read for most of us who almost catch up or caught up think just many more chapters will take to reach the climax If the introductory chapters took 5 to 7 volumes But believe me your way of creating complicated ideas is amazing But you sucks at creating character dynamics if you could work on that it will be amazing And I’m looking forward to your next novel in the futureimage
The rest is too long to detail and probably pointless now, but I'll follow directly with the second phase in a few days, hopefully 10 chapters before Monday. The new book will show you more what I tried to do here and the lore, and it will correct the mistakes I made before in many ways. hope to see you there too and make something that you will appreciate
Chaos_lord_:You see when writing you have to take notes of several things(what will makes your readers stay and enjoy it) it doesn’t have to be only happy story or sad, you can blend. Not all side characters have to be hated(btw i hate all yours) You can make evil villains, write great story about them that will make us loves them and villains that are evil just for the sake of it. You see when the characters betray him It doesn’t have to be all of them Like how you portray freya she’s a great thinker or zuri who’s kinda obsessed with and wouldn’t mind staying with any version of him they shouldn’t be part of this betrayal Dean can betray him she’s stupid Eryl its not the first time Eris for the greater future Moonra and solaria are afraid of their mother But now when everyone betrays him, uses him Then now think they can’t handle this version of him they created And concluded it’s time to erase his memories again and start from the fresh. Rejected the idea he left then start to antagonising And again the characters band together to stop him And another persona appears with maybe is the real one and possibly recovers all his memories When it’s settled they got back again like nothing happens without any consequences of their since almost all of them are part of the harem( marie and lilith were there they uses him to kill, they should have done something) Then probably from then you will start introducing the sins. Believe me it will be hella boring and hard to read for most of us who almost catch up or caught up think just many more chapters will take to reach the climax If the introductory chapters took 5 to 7 volumes But believe me your way of creating complicated ideas is amazing But you sucks at creating character dynamics if you could work on that it will be amazing And I’m looking forward to your next novel in the futureimage
Yalatola:i understand, the point you mentioned are correct, the point of the betrayal was that the one in control wasn't Dora but the sin, so erasing his memory the first time was wise, as for the second it was planned but when the mother will come this Dora would refuse. The story from this point will never be back to them together, the idea was that they would use him and he would awake in two side, one who would learn yo be the true Dora in a parallel world and the second who would turn against everyone after chapter 183 and everyone he killed would be revive in a sort of heaven where the good Dora is with Midgard and Elizabeth (reverberating to the evil Dora in making him believe that if he kill everyone he will save the world)
Yalatola:The rest is too long to detail and probably pointless now, but I'll follow directly with the second phase in a few days, hopefully 10 chapters before Monday. The new book will show you more what I tried to do here and the lore, and it will correct the mistakes I made before in many ways. hope to see you there too and make something that you will appreciate