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You see when writing you have to take notes of several things(what will makes your readers stay and enjoy it) it doesn’t have to be only happy story or sad, you can blend. Not all side characters have to be hated(btw i hate all yours) You can make evil villains, write great story about them that will make us loves them and villains that are evil just for the sake of it. You see when the characters betray him It doesn’t have to be all of them Like how you portray freya she’s a great thinker or zuri who’s kinda obsessed with and wouldn’t mind staying with any version of him they shouldn’t be part of this betrayal Dean can betray him she’s stupid Eryl its not the first time Eris for the greater future Moonra and solaria are afraid of their mother But now when everyone betrays him, uses him Then now think they can’t handle this version of him they created And concluded it’s time to erase his memories again and start from the fresh. Rejected the idea he left then start to antagonising And again the characters band together to stop him And another persona appears with maybe is the real one and possibly recovers all his memories When it’s settled they got back again like nothing happens without any consequences of their since almost all of them are part of the harem( marie and lilith were there they uses him to kill, they should have done something) Then probably from then you will start introducing the sins. Believe me it will be hella boring and hard to read for most of us who almost catch up or caught up think just many more chapters will take to reach the climax If the introductory chapters took 5 to 7 volumes But believe me your way of creating complicated ideas is amazing But you sucks at creating character dynamics if you could work on that it will be amazing And I’m looking forward to your next novel in the future
The writing quality of this was superb. Thr author has a very creative mind that consolidates his ideas. But all that are nothing if the story is not enjoyable. up to the chapter 169 there’re not much main characters development. Mc has many personas but there’s no main one since they keep changing and getting deleted. So it’s like reading the story with a whole new mc, then later he will be deleted and changed to another persona Up to the chapter I read i got no attachment to the main characters, mc can die and i will feel nothing. I gave it so many chance i read up to 169 chaps And there’s no much development to the story. I can’t imagine myself continuing it when there’s not much chapters remaining to catch up, and I dunno how many it would take to develop. And it’s frustrating that mc never make a good decisions on himself. He was just getting used from the beginning to the where i stopped.