Review Detail of Violet_Ivory in Draft for ReWorld

I read from the prologue till like chapter 5. This is not a style of writing im particularly used to. its very laid back, like my dad is telling me some lore about himself while casually brushing by very important details. I think fantasy is a good genre for making things dramatic in the writing and i see instances of that here, but then the previous laid back style takes over and it almost feels like a fever dream, idk its just my opinion. The story seems interesting, I think the whole phases of the world and how our mc can tap into that is cool, because you could do anything with that; theres a lot of possibilities that should definitely be taken advantage of. Also there were quite a few instances in grammar being a little shaky. its present->past->present->past all within the same paragraph, plus just some words that shouldnt be there or typos. Theres a little mystery sprinkled here and there on how the world ended or began or ended again and began again, it could get a little confusing and others have shared the same opinion. but as i said before, the topic is interesting and with good character design and an improvement in grammar, this story could be x10 better