Review Detail of daylightmoon123445 in The Undying Star

I like the mysterious feel this whole story gives off, and the light and dark humor added to this story. You did a good job introducing the main character(s), that's quite a skill and engages the readers, so I'll say you are off to a good start! I'm sad it only got 7k views, because this is quite the tale. Though, I think the main reason is the synopsis being short(a little too short...) but I think that's not the main problem. Just keep writing, and you'll be fine :)