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Couple of things, first of all feels like a copy of douluo, second I feel the way he gets his power is not shown enough its just he magically can train better than anyone else has ever done. Another thing is that I cant seem to understand if the main character is a guy or a girl. In the end he just gets powerful outta nowhere and the only explanation is he trained in a special way and from the other dude dad we figure out he createz like 7 diferent tecniques outta nowhere with no guidance.
Zen World
Arsone
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Thank you for the input provided. This story itself was built using a bit of Doulou Dalu's foundation, it's just that I've changed a lot of things to avoid plagiarism problems and also I want to earn income from my work. Writing Fanfiction is strictly forbidden to make money, thus, it's impossible for me to do it. Then regarding matters of training or ability, I didn't show it not because I didn't want to. It's just that the story will be boring during the training. This is what caused me not to show the training process that was carried out and only directly showed his abilities.
I understand the basis of training not being fun but I feel that the fun of original power systems is slowly figuring out their rules and how to improve them. It gives the story more meaning thats why people like underdog stories because we want to see how the mc will overcome these obstacles be it knowledge, planning, training, taking a risk. Also be fun for characters to have their own personalized way of fighting based on their strengths plus this world has had this zen powers for ages they must have unique ways to use it that the mc doesnt know.
Arsone:Thank you for the input provided. This story itself was built using a bit of Doulou Dalu's foundation, it's just that I've changed a lot of things to avoid plagiarism problems and also I want to earn income from my work. Writing Fanfiction is strictly forbidden to make money, thus, it's impossible for me to do it. Then regarding matters of training or ability, I didn't show it not because I didn't want to. It's just that the story will be boring during the training. This is what caused me not to show the training process that was carried out and only directly showed his abilities.
Thank you for the advice. I will slowly improve the story and also related to the problem of the story, I have written on my other account and if you want to read it again, please visit a book called Land of Zen. That's the book where the author is Xin. That is me.
Unknown_Bystander_:I understand the basis of training not being fun but I feel that the fun of original power systems is slowly figuring out their rules and how to improve them. It gives the story more meaning thats why people like underdog stories because we want to see how the mc will overcome these obstacles be it knowledge, planning, training, taking a risk. Also be fun for characters to have their own personalized way of fighting based on their strengths plus this world has had this zen powers for ages they must have unique ways to use it that the mc doesnt know.