Review Detail of Spenzpenz in Draft11

Look Elyon, I liked your book ( the necromancer one ) but I think you have an issue. Now I will give you credit where it is due, in my relatively short time here, on this app, you are one of the better writers here but you have a huge problem with openings. I don't think I am really qualified to judge you since I only read one of your books but still your openings don't really hook people in. Secondly, this wasn't an issue before but it seems like you're rushing, i don't know why you're doing this (even though I have a hypothesis ) but take your time, give us a good and stable setup for an equivalent story. But be warned don't let it turn into an expositionary sludge fest. I mean keep good pace. And I don't know your personal reason for your naming convention but try something a bit more pleasing to say. Accept that, you are good. You tell stories I can enjoy so 👍. N: Hope this has a good spin on it and sorry for the low rating but in some aspects the start out is lacking.