Review Detail of Vimbai_Murindagomo in 100 days with the Grimm Reaper

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Hats to you Adira. You have done a superb job with this offering. Initially the story is low however building up to end chapter 1 on a most interesting cliff hanger. There are some errors that I noted in chapter 1 to do with mixing of tenses right at the onset of the story. Then there was the passage where you wrote, "...she whispered there is someone..." This in the context of someone who lives alone. They would most likely think and not whisper that there is someone in the house. Beyond which I found the build up quite enjoyable especially as it begins to gain in pace. Got job.

100 days with the Grimm Reaper


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