Review Detail of John_Ryan_8278 in Mushoku Tensei - A Second Chance

Let me begin by pointing out this story's good points 1. The grammar is very good 2. The updating stability seems good 3. An interesting premise Now I shall begin on the bad parts of the story this shall take up the majority of the review as I do need to provide examples 1. The pacing is atrocious it is damn near irredeemable in that department For example, the first 5 chapters cover nearly a decade of content or volume 1 of the Ln Most scenes are scenes it is just the author listing off events that happened in cannon with no details or dialogue 2. Rudeus The author claims his mc is Oldeus but anyone who has read the thing can see this isn’t the case For example when he sees Sylphy being bullied by toddlers he a damn near 100yr old man uses magic and threatens them in such an edgy way that I got a paper cut reading it 3. The lack of any logic For example, he lets Sylphy be bullied for years because he seemingly forgets that his WIFE is being bullied and is helpless to stop it If you read the story I point a lot of these cases out in the comments because trust me they happen a lot 4. OOC characters None of the characters acts as they should For example, Zenith a new mother doesn’t go to check on her child when, when he goes to walk Sylphy back home but doesn’t return for hours 5. Lack of dialogue/description I mentioned this earlier but most scenes aren’t described past two lines of dialogue and there is rarely dialogue For example, the first time he uses saint-tier magic a pretty significant moment is 3 sentences I covered the horse in a stone dome Roxy cast the spell I cast the spell That was quite literally the extent of it Overall if you are wondering if you should read this id say no because it fails in every regard a novel should succeed or try to succeed in But if you do decide to read it anyways prepare yourself to suspend your disbelief beyond any reasonable amount And author I do not mean to be rude or discourage you from writing as no one was instantly a god at writing but I am trying to be objective here