Review Detail of Solomonsquill in The Ape From Space
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it's a interesting story so far (I'm in ch 20) and I hope that it keeps getting interesting. I have a couple of advices tho, you should put more tags and explain that it is a sayan in the rwby. I don't like the name Kron but that's just my opinion so don't stress over it and finally i don't know why but when you write an a (alone)it's always a capital letter. For example: I was looking at the scenery when A nevermore appeared. if you can try to correct that mistake for future chapters. Overall I enjoyed the story so keep you work, I just wanted to give you a piece of my mind don't take it in a bad way please. Also, I don't know what to think about the artwork....
The Ape From Space
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Solomonsquill:No problem just trying to help. Also, in the following chapters I noticed that you use where instead of we are.Where is not a verb, it is a word used while asking the location of something or someone. in spanish is the word "donde". Once again don't take it in a bad way, I enjoy your story and just want to help improve. I myself are still very lacking in English as it is not my first language. Thanks for your work so far.
No problem just trying to help. Also, in the following chapters I noticed that you use where instead of we are.Where is not a verb, it is a word used while asking the location of something or someone. in spanish is the word "donde". Once again don't take it in a bad way, I enjoy your story and just want to help improve. I myself are still very lacking in English as it is not my first language. Thanks for your work so far.