Not bad… bit of cliche here and there, and some fix up of grammar is needed, but is a lot better than almost 80% of the novels I’ve seen on here. Some of the narrative and dialogue don’t seem to draw me in, and I won’t go into detail about that, as I’m not an author. Overall, pretty good.
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