Review Detail of DeadzNaKo in The Starcraft System in the Far Future

My real score for this fic is 4, but considering the number of existing star craft fics in circulation, I felt it deserved one more star. I didn't notice any glaring mistakes, but one thing that really disturbed my experience is the transitions. One moment you are reading a scene and the next moment you're suddenly somewhere else. Overall this fic is great, I hope the author would keep updating.