Review Detail of Vortex_Luminos2v in Danmachi: Honored One

Okay, I will first say I didn't read all of it yet but I will give my grievance with this fic. Firstly, the grammar is god awful. There are a lot of spelling errors and disjointed sentences. Dear god please check with someone who speaks english and adjust before posting. Second, I found the fact that logic seemed to have taken a leap from the ground and somehow buried itself in jupiter. What I mean is that there some things that just don't make sense at all. Example being on how the executives of his familia have not even interacted or even meet the mc, after years and being a level 6. How? How have the not yet met? And lastly. The interaction between characters seemed shallow at best. It feels as if it doesn’t dwell much onto the chemistry between the characters. That is all I have to say for now, I might update a review after reading the rest you planned. But first, please fix the grammar.