Review Detail of Copperhawk in Re:life with Karmic Gacha (Modern Family)

SPOILERS I DIDNT ADD THE TAG CAUSE IT MESSES WITH FORMATTING Writing Quality: It makes sense, it isn't filled with grammar and writing mistakes. Overall pretty good except for one main problem. It reads like they are writing a tv script and not a novel. It seems that they got caught up in the idea of replicating the feel of the show but they completely messed up the flow. They also failed the rule of "show don't tell." for example "Haley pouted, she tried to look annoyed but Ed could see that she was embarrassed" With the context we only needed the first 2 words but it explains the motivations of everyone's actions and ruins the flow even more. Stability of Updates: Not much to mention here, pretty good. Story Development: Kind of a mess. I know its slice of life but It will jump around from school, to his acting career to his dad, to his absent mother to the Dunphy family. Character Design: MC is kind of a shit person. Since he travelled to the past he steals a bunch of songs that weren't released yet. He also drinks and smokes weed when his body is fifteen and he peer pressure his also fifteen best friend into drinking. Normally im fine with an asshole MC but he seems like a nice dude usually but then just acts like an dick and it isn't even recognized that he doing terrible shit. He doesn't even have a moral debate about how he is stealing those songs from people. He also doesn't feel like a real person. He acts really weird and contrary sometimes. He meets penny from the Big Bang Theory at a restaurant and just suddenly offers her a lead role in his music video when she's a pretty shit actress just for no reason. And it's not because he likes her because of the big bang theory because when he has the chance to go to the set of Iron Man 2 he just doesn't give a fuck. He's like "oh im only here to support my friends" and it just feels like feigned apathy to seem cool. Also about the portrayals of characters. It is pretty good for most of the characters but then it goes to shit. Haley and alex's personality seems to be sidelined for their crush on Edward. Same for Taylor swift and selena gomez. RDJ was just introduced and his personality feels pretty empty, the portrayal of him was pretty empty and just boiled down to feigned arrogance and sarcasm without the actual charisma. World Background: Not much to say here. Just the normal 2009 with a bunch of tv show characters made real. Now for some of my biggest gripes: It needs to be tagged OP. He just doesn't really have challenges, all the girls surrounding have a crush on him. Haley and Alex are practically in love with him, the most popular girl in his grade is a literal yandere, TAYLOR SWIFT AND SELENA GOMEZ like him and he has countless obsessed fans. Not to mention he has sex with Taylor swift (HES 15 and SHES 19). His career is going incredibly well without any problems. His only challenge is being overworked but he still goes to school for some reason when he has like 170 iq and can easily graduate right now. Forgot to mention about the time he wrote a 60 page management report for his company in 50 minutes. WTF. Even if he was typing 200 words a minute with double spaces it wouldn't be enough. He didn't get any typing stuff from the gacha either so there is just no fucking way. It just broke the camels back for me to make this review.