I believe my review is very fair. Having read a bit into the story by now, I am disappointed with the fight scenes and thought process of the characters The three biggest cons I have with this story is: 1. MC gets the things he needs too easily and too conveniently. It always happens before a big fight or a big transaction 2. The other characters are literally NPCS and I mean that in the most literal sense. They do not question their lord or anything. It just feels like a kingdom building story but with no soul. Just the MC is cognitive sorta 3. Information about things just drop out of nowhere - no leading context. And if you know a good story, you should know that it is better “to show and not tell”. I just feel like we’re constantly being introduced a new information but it just doesn’t feel very succinct - just so jarring and abrupt
A Green Bird
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