Review Detail of PacificIslander in One Piece : Kingdom Building System
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(go to end if too lazy to read lel) Sorry this is my opinion based off of reading the first two chapters but. There's not really much information about this story in general, it doesn't really beat around the bush and just goes into the story without any real preparations for the main character. A few things at the start already don't make sense, there's a system which is alright I guess. My only complaint here is that everything is just convinient at the start, the only sort of *work* that the main character puts into it at the start is literally just dividing territories for the future. Also it seems that the system has a conscious and is also named a feminine name. The main character literally has immortality ( and his summons as well, ) along with being able to summon Hashirama Senju at full power at the age of 18 being empowered by haki. Plus he gets instant loyalty. Also somehow 9 million people INSTANTLY hear of his kingdom in 4 seconds because apparently a woman who can see into the future tells everyone. (yes, 9 million no joke) along with that he has a fog that protects his land for 2 years TLDR; bunch of plot holes, immortal MC+his summons, 9 million people, fog that protects his land for 2 years at the begining, his first summon being Hashirama Senju from Naruto whos 18(immortal) and strong cuz haki. I'll read more and change my review if it becomes any better
One Piece : Kingdom Building System
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For those who are wondering about this article, is this my original writing or not. This is my original writing. I am the account owner of Aresonepice before. I have created this new account because of the various kinds of pressure you previously put on me. You ask for an update soon and it's very interesting to see. I created this new account to forget about it and want to start over. The people who uploaded my story were the people who copied and pasted my story. I asked for payment from my story so that I can also make money from this place. I want my hobby of writing to make money and prove to my parents that my writing efforts are not in vain. Therefore, I apologize if I charge you my readers. It was also so that I could continue writing the story. Otherwise, I might have been asked to stop by my parents. If I quit, to be honest, I would probably get stressed and go crazy because the ideas I had in my head couldn't get out. I always had a lot of ideas and thoughts in my head and they had to be put out. Otherwise, I won't be able to rest or fall asleep. Those of you who always put pressure on me to update quickly are also the ones who usually force those ideas out which makes me feel a lot of pressure. Because of that, I apologize. I do this also want my efforts to produce something. Also, so that my hobby of writing is not stopped by my parents.
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Arsone:For those who are wondering about this article, is this my original writing or not. This is my original writing. I am the account owner of Aresonepice before. I have created this new account because of the various kinds of pressure you previously put on me. You ask for an update soon and it's very interesting to see. I created this new account to forget about it and want to start over. The people who uploaded my story were the people who copied and pasted my story. I asked for payment from my story so that I can also make money from this place. I want my hobby of writing to make money and prove to my parents that my writing efforts are not in vain. Therefore, I apologize if I charge you my readers. It was also so that I could continue writing the story. Otherwise, I might have been asked to stop by my parents. If I quit, to be honest, I would probably get stressed and go crazy because the ideas I had in my head couldn't get out. I always had a lot of ideas and thoughts in my head and they had to be put out. Otherwise, I won't be able to rest or fall asleep. Those of you who always put pressure on me to update quickly are also the ones who usually force those ideas out which makes me feel a lot of pressure. Because of that, I apologize. I do this also want my efforts to produce something. Also, so that my hobby of writing is not stopped by my parents.