Review Detail of Kw0z in The 100 : The duty of a leader
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Although I give you props for keeping this fanfic steady for so long since I know how hard it is, the fanfic itself just isn’t great. Mind you, I only read through 3 chapters, so my opinion isn’t exactly great since everything could change for all I know, but the story itself is just so… cringe. I mean, Octavia is suddenly willing to die for him (when I say suddenly, I really mean it. They barely even know each other), and then a few seconds later, she walks out, leaving him. Ah, did I mention that the entire drama started because of a seat belt? Yeah, Bellamy didn’t want him to be unseatbelted(?) Like what? He would’ve gotten out sooner or later. No need to go pointing a gun at him.
The 100 : The duty of a leader
MeatBunKun
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Well first thing first, thanks for taking the time to read this long-as-s ff. You are right the first chapters are quite cringe and while I plan to rewrite them, that would have to wait at least until I finish the fourth season and probably the last one for this fanfiction since I see no point going into space and etc.
Kw0z:Once again, props for having the endurance to continue writing a fanfic on a story that isn’t really great for long fanfics. You just might want to rewrite those first few cringe and unrealistic chapters if you want more readers.
MeatBunKun:Well first thing first, thanks for taking the time to read this long-as-s ff. You are right the first chapters are quite cringe and while I plan to rewrite them, that would have to wait at least until I finish the fourth season and probably the last one for this fanfiction since I see no point going into space and etc.