Review Detail of Victor_Vaden in Immortal Supreme: Sovereign of the Grand Dao
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Hello, everyone. Giving the first five-star review to my book cuz, why not? And also cause I believe in it too. Anyway, let me tell you a bit about the book itself...or rather a few things to expect; > Mc will have character growth, so he ain't perfect from the start. > Mc has the advantage of having read many cultivation novels. That should give you a hint of how that could help himđ that's all for now, hope you read it!
Immortal Supreme: Sovereign of the Grand Dao
Victor_Vaden
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Nice story. Makes me think heavily of the Infinity Gems from marvel comics though. That can be vert off putting for some people as it gives it a 'copied someone else's' idea feel, even when you haven't. Also, in the first chapter, there's a kinda MAJOR error in your story concept. You mention 9 specific gods. Then say there can never be more than that, because 9 is a prime number. O....kay... This is all kinds of wrong. Why? First, 9 is not a prime number. A prime number is the smallest number a number can be reduced to (usually via division), such as: 0, 1, 3, 5, and 7. And the number 9 can be broken down to 3, since 3*3=9, so not a Prime. Second, being a prime number does not limit how many, but how few there can be. In a story this would read "there can never be fewer than (9) gods at any time," (as that is the incorrect number you used) . This translates to "if one less than 9 exist, a new one will appear immediately to fill the empty slot." There are NO EXCEPTIONS to this - this is an absolute. On the other hand, there's NO LIMIT on the number that could exist IN TOTAL. Be it 9...100... or even 999^upteenth-thousandth power, or what not. In math this reads something like ( 9 ad infinity.) So the entire concept basis you've laid out in chapter one can't support the logic for the rest of the book... đ
Unit29:Nice story. Makes me think heavily of the Infinity Gems from marvel comics though. That can be vert off putting for some people as it gives it a 'copied someone else's' idea feel, even when you haven't. Also, in the first chapter, there's a kinda MAJOR error in your story concept. You mention 9 specific gods. Then say there can never be more than that, because 9 is a prime number. O....kay... This is all kinds of wrong. Why? First, 9 is not a prime number. A prime number is the smallest number a number can be reduced to (usually via division), such as: 0, 1, 3, 5, and 7. And the number 9 can be broken down to 3, since 3*3=9, so not a Prime. Second, being a prime number does not limit how many, but how few there can be. In a story this would read "there can never be fewer than (9) gods at any time," (as that is the incorrect number you used) . This translates to "if one less than 9 exist, a new one will appear immediately to fill the empty slot." There are NO EXCEPTIONS to this - this is an absolute. On the other hand, there's NO LIMIT on the number that could exist IN TOTAL. Be it 9...100... or even 999^upteenth-thousandth power, or what not. In math this reads something like ( 9 ad infinity.) So the entire concept basis you've laid out in chapter one can't support the logic for the rest of the book... đ
DaoistHMPf6y:the story is good but I want to talk about chap 5, chap 5 is basically a music:(STORY by NF) if author is a fan of nf please tell me so we can be palz
DaoistHMPf6y:the story is good but I want to talk about chap 5, chap 5 is basically a music:(STORY by NF) if author is a fan of nf please tell me so we can be palz
romance? yes. snu snu? no, not really. harem? yes. how many? yes. Yuri? nah... NTR??! Nope, nada, nah... But is the MC awesome? Of course you bet he is! should you still read? If you like interesting MC and powers, yes.
Bradley_Killick:Few questionsâŚ.Is there romance?âŚis there any snu any scenes? Is there harem?(if so how many) and if there is harem and snu snu scenes is there any yuri between harem members? And final question is there any NTR
Thanks for answering my questions! Will continue the novel. Canât read more than free chapters currently do to having no money(life sucks) but when I can I will do so.
Victor_Vaden:romance? yes. snu snu? no, not really. harem? yes. how many? yes. Yuri? nah... NTR??! Nope, nada, nah... But is the MC awesome? Of course you bet he is! should you still read? If you like interesting MC and powers, yes.