Review Detail of bibiyenini in One Last December

When someone asked me for a review, I'll make it a roasting one. First off, I understand the title, but I think you understand that Webnovel doesn't cater vague titles. I know for a part as a writer you want to write what you have in mind (because I am the same way when I first landed on contracted world) but believe me, those principles would change overtime. Seeing your synopsis and first chapter, it doesn't seem to pull me in. Synopsis isn't catchy, short, and it doesn't excite readers who will read the first part. The title is capitalized, too. I suggest to change it to lowercase letters. Make the title sensible to the theme, too. Make sure you have the right mix up of words for the readers to get intrigued. Second, I really don't get the overview of the story by reading the synopsis. Editors always pay attention to the synopsis because it's the THIRD thing readers will see. Aside from having your title as indefinite, the readers would just scroll through and they won't question what the content is all about. Third, you tell rather than showing details what is the character was doing. You are telling the readers the doctor is stitching the patient's wound and that everyone looked at him. Change it to something like: 'The nurses along the operating room shifted their eyes to me as I stopped from dressing the patient's wound.' Avoid being redundant. Avoid saying the obvious thing as if the readers don't understand it. E.g. "I have woken up from sleep" Eradicate the 'from sleep.' It's obvious he WOKEN up because he's ASLEEP. Last, the punctuation. You keep on forgetting the comma and the period before the start of the next sentence. Just be mindful of those details, because readers might get interrupted with the flow. So that's it. I hope this helps. Good luck on your future endeavors!