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Not bad. It's actually read good, but it's not great, what would make it great is if you write dialogues as they should be, like this: "Hey, what are you doing?" Person 1 asks, watching over the shoulder of Person 2 with curiosity. "I'm teaching someone how to write a dialogue." "Why?" "Well, I want them to become a better writer than they already are and most people click off if they don't see properly written dialogue." "Like you." Person 1 jokes. Person 2 stops and looks over his shoulder, and shoots person 1 a glare. Moments later Person 2 is chasing after Person 1 while cussing them out, and promising pain, while Person 1 screams for mercy. ^Thats what I except to see, alright now good day to you. ;)