Review Detail of Masaiya_Ako in Removed 之后.....

This have great potential if you polished your writing skills. I like that you know when to write expositions but your story telling was a bit scuffed as the flow of events are sometimes rushed. Another thing to mention, it's best you form a habit of capitalizing the first letter of the names of your characters to make it more presentable. Flaws aside, I like the way how you did the world building and character behavior as you have a potential to be a great world building writer. All in all it was a good read!