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Idk why I can't leave a vote just because I used japanese characters as a cool looking font. But even if I update it webnovel won't let me vote. So whether the voting would be disabled in price for the cool looking font on my latest chapter is worth it or not would be up to my reader. If you want to vote to support me just let me know. I'll try to think of other ways without hindering the quality of my writing.
This is the first time I've been exposed to Historical genre so I'll give my honest opinions. The writing quality is absolutely great. Although English isn't my first language, I liked the way you used complicated words without losing its meaning. Even with all that you still managed to keep me hooked up to read the next chapter. Though story is already interesting especially the character interaction which felt real to me so that's a plus! As this was still my first experience with the genre I still have no comparison to the standards. Other than that, It was a great read!
This have great potential if you polished your writing skills. I like that you know when to write expositions but your story telling was a bit scuffed as the flow of events are sometimes rushed. Another thing to mention, it's best you form a habit of capitalizing the first letter of the names of your characters to make it more presentable. Flaws aside, I like the way how you did the world building and character behavior as you have a potential to be a great world building writer. All in all it was a good read!
"... tree truck..." I knew you meant "tree trunk" but imagining a truck in the middle of the forest made me chuckle XD
This is just my preference but if you written it something like this then it will look cleaner. "...What's this? A jungle? Just where the heck am I? Why does everything looked bigger?!" This shows the MC genuinely confused about his circumstances. Though you may change the intonation depending on his personality.