The dialogue has a decent flow and the use of hyphens instead of quotations marks was an interesting way to read, the first I've seen. World-building and character design can use some work, I couldn't visualize any settings nor conversations being had in the first few lines which are crucial to captivating a reader. Despite the needed touching-up, it's a decent read.
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