Review Detail of ItzYaboiSky in Rise Of The Infinite Sovereign

Iz me, guy who likes grammar. So yeah, the grammar in this story? 4.5/10 (Relatively better than most other books on the website as the standard has honestly fallen...) Why? Well to begin, small things such as punctuation (ya forget a lot of periods bro), weird choice of words, change in tenses where it shouldn't change, etc... (Small things I know, but these things add up fast and fixing them is easy and eases the reader into a better reading experience. And now to the moderately bigger problem the 1st chapter has character consistency (yes I only read the 1st chapter but if the author already has these types of issues in the beginning, I think it's reasonable to think that these problems exist in the later chapters). Well in this case, narrator consistency. In the beginning, the narrator is describing things in a neutral way; he is 'passive'. But sometimes he 'says' things in a way that makes it seem like a being talking to another; he is more 'active' in these scenarios. And the guy switches between the two rarely but it still confuses the hell out of me. Also another one of the moderate issues is the paragraph structuring which is pretty inconsistent as well. There was one where two separate ideas were placed in the same damn paragraph which makes me worry. Anyway that's that, again most of the issues listed are pretty damn easy to fix if you just proofread or get an editor. Oh my opinion on the story? Idk man. I'm only here to reveiw ze grammar. And even if I were to review it but, you can call me a bastard or whatever, I first gotta be able to read and understand the damn book before forming an opinion on it alright. It's just like the coding shizz from a video game, it don't matter if ya got nuttiest idea if you can't even execute/show it in the first place.