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Review Detail of Z_Ril in Naruto: The Thunder Swordsman

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Writing quality: 3 stars the author didn't know how to make speech of high ranking people(like god, animal sages, etc) sounds poetic. it sounds like it was written by a teen. not good, but bot bad. the author didn't use words like fourth hokage, third hogake and instead use hokage only. he didn't know how to make beautiful respectful response towards important people like hogake( most of the times ) like using " i accept but where do we need to spar?" to the hokage instead of "it would be my honour to have a spar with you, hokage-sama". see the difference? Story development: 4 stars The author used a lot of long timeskips. again, not good but not bad. Character design: 3 stars The supposedly MC goal is too cliche. ya know "I want to protect my loved ones so that they wont have to fear anything!!" kind of cliche. the author repeated this a lot of times. Despite being a Sword master of our world, he lacks control over his emotions. there's a lot of other things that lacks about MC and other characters. but i wont waste my time doing it. Updating Stability: 3 stars It's 1 chapter per week. better than most i guess. World background: 4 stars Its an alternate universe of naruto because of butterfly effects that caused by previous owner of MC body as a baby. he spotted jiraiya peeking in and caused the other woman inside noticed and screams. which then caught the attention of Tsunade. and the small ball of snow rolled into a gigantic mountain of snow. ( and The MC thinks that it's jiraiya fault lol) Overall: 3.4 out of 5 Better then most naruto fanfic, but not the best.

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Naruto: The Thunder Swordsman

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Thanks for the review, I will try to improve.