Review Detail of thefirespeaks in deleteed010

Hello, author-nim. This novel actually tackled about magic. However, in the first three chapters that I've there were less likely, even slow, world-building. I want something, as a reader, that would give me a clear glimpse of the school's entire area, and the places Arthur had been to. It was quite vague. Secondly, the paragraphs are unexpectedly long. There are some readers who get irritated with super long paragraphs. The succeeding long paragraphs honestly looked monotonous to read, regardless of the content. Thirdly, typographical errors are normal but long sentences definitely aren't. At some circumstances, long sentences is significant. However, if it can be shortened, have it short rather than making it longer. It honestly made my mind unable to breath. Anyhow, as for the character of Arthur, he was a bit interesting. I don't know what he's up to or what his goals are, but I like him being overpowered (like what I usually read). I thought he was weak at first, but I was unexpectedly welcomed with him crushing Leon with a word. Some other characters like Leon being arrogant, I really do hope he had enough reason to hate or talk condescendingly with Arthur. Story development was fast for the first three chapters I have read. Although it was fast, it became a bit slower due to the long paragraphs. So, props to this, because it actually worked. Overall, I love the premise of this novel and the storyline. I hope to see further improvements, so this would be more cleaner and logical to read. Keep it up, author-nim!