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LesserCodex
LesserCodexAuthor1yrLesserCodex

I gave myself 3 stars because I know I'm not that good but I do improve. For those who skip the description. There is one love interests Mina as expected. This is a fanfic of BNHA with Kirishima waking with memories of a past life having watched BNHA, his character doesn't have a big change in personality since it's not really reincarnation but more like watered transmigration only being more spirited than before. If you don't like that there's little change in his character's personality then I'm sorry. He will interact with Izuku if you think that is forced then ready any other fanfic, he does help but not to the point of "simping" over the boy as someone commented previously. Writing wise my grammar has improved of course there are small mistakes that crack through but it doesn't ruin immersion. The story will trend along the lines of cannon nothing will change in the beginning but will come later make things exciting. I'm doing my best and will take kind criticism. If you have any question you can ask here.

To Become Unstoppable

LesserCodex

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Dethpool_Mlg
Dethpool_MlgLv4Dethpool_Mlg

More like didn't care to read moment

Kapuchinik:Literally “can’t read” moment
Omega_RX
Omega_RXLv4Omega_RX

You need to put some kinda indicator during scene changes because it's all over the place.Also adding the smaller but still important events while add more depth and enjoyment to the story,as a finisher please try to keep the timeline striat because some stuff is out of order in chapter 9 or 10

LesserCodex
LesserCodexAuthorLesserCodex

Thanks you for letting me know I'll do that for the next chapter tommorow. And I will add small events for other characters aswell as focus on them too to further push the story. Thanks again and I'd love to hear your thoughts on it if it's they're good changes.

Omega_RX:You need to put some kinda indicator during scene changes because it's all over the place.Also adding the smaller but still important events while add more depth and enjoyment to the story,as a finisher please try to keep the timeline striat because some stuff is out of order in chapter 9 or 10
Dethpool_Mlg
Dethpool_MlgLv4Dethpool_Mlg

is it harem?

LesserCodex:Thanks you for letting me know I'll do that for the next chapter tommorow. And I will add small events for other characters aswell as focus on them too to further push the story. Thanks again and I'd love to hear your thoughts on it if it's they're good changes.
LesserCodex
LesserCodexAuthorLesserCodex

No

Dethpool_Mlg:is it harem?
Onions
OnionsLv3Onions

Based

LesserCodex:No
Eman_Santil
Eman_SantilLv12Eman_Santil

please tell me you didn't drop the story

LesserCodex
LesserCodexAuthorLesserCodex

I didnt drop the story.

Eman_Santil:please tell me you didn't drop the story
Eman_Santil
Eman_SantilLv12Eman_Santil

are you uploading somewhere else or when you gonna add a another chapter

LesserCodex
LesserCodexAuthorLesserCodex

I'm currently going back and editing but I'll chapters out by the end of this weak earlier if I can have a better timetable I'll drop a chapter tommorow and then get back to it.

Eman_Santil:are you uploading somewhere else or when you gonna add a another chapter
PizzaStopsTime
PizzaStopsTimeLv4PizzaStopsTime

Author please update 🙏

Kapuchinik
KapuchinikLv5Kapuchinik

Literally “can’t read” moment

Dethpool_Mlg:is it harem?