Review Detail of Franklin_Nwakamma in My Goalkeeping System
Review detail
Shameless author review here. This is first time writing a sports novel so don't expect this to be a super novel although I am a super football fan so I am sure of what I am doing. My grammar isn't great but I'm pretty sure it's readable and I try my best to minimise errors. Drop any questions you need answers toš„°
My Goalkeeping System
Franklin_Nwakamma
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Well, this was my first football novel and I can assure you it gets better later on, though, you might not want to stick around for that long which is understandable.
Judah_7283:was reading G.O.A.T system and I thought well football novels will be good but this is just a** like man who gets a system and is just being half assed with it. The system should have moved on in my opinion, you better up ur game noob or stop writing
TrackShadow:some suggestions 1. moderate pace 2. shows his personal life too 3. dont go into romance until the mid of the novel. 4. it would be better if it is in the real world 5. set some challenges from the system r real life where he loses 6. rise in confidence with character buildup
TrackShadow:these are just some suggestions. do your own thing brother. follow your own inspiration. hope for the best
From the sypnosis, is that all the MC is gonna be? Just a pro? Not a legend or the best goal keeper the world had ever seen? If heās just gonna be a pro then please let me know. Iām not here to see someone become regular like the rest of world but to see someone conquer it and leave a mark. So please tell me, it would save a lot of my time.
samuel_A:From the sypnosis, is that all the MC is gonna be? Just a pro? Not a legend or the best goal keeper the world had ever seen? If heās just gonna be a pro then please let me know. Iām not here to see someone become regular like the rest of world but to see someone conquer it and leave a mark. So please tell me, it would save a lot of my time.
Franklin_Nwakamma:Pro is just the base, he's going to be great but I don't think you'll like the way he began.
mystic_dark_100:who cares brother the fact you brought out a story this good shows how much you put into it [img=recommend], from one Nigerian to another I respect u no cap
mystic_dark_100:Yes I am, an edo boy for that matter, mystic dark is just my pen name
QuaziY:Dave is like a lazy rich spoiled brat. He has no talent, doesn't train, complain about everything etc. System is like trying hard to make him a footballer (Goalkeeper).
Dave is annoying and stupid and doesn't listen when the system is trying to help him. I swear if you plan on doing another sports novel, please do a smarter person who wants to be the best. Dave is not him it's best to kill him off he just pathetic trash no matter who tries to help him.
Franklin_Nwakamma:In the early chapters yeah, but he's really improved in the current chapters
I know, I learnt a lot from this one given that it's my sports novel so the next one will be better but, if you continue, it gets better down the line.
RyuSenju:Dave is annoying and stupid and doesn't listen when the system is trying to help him. I swear if you plan on doing another sports novel, please do a smarter person who wants to be the best. Dave is not him it's best to kill him off he just pathetic trash no matter who tries to help him.image