Review Detail of PerkyPompous_Pixie in The Story About me and The Girl who Asked me out

First chapter in, you know this is going to be a teen story with a R18 concept. Not one to judge and I know this is a work of fiction but I'm surprised to learn they started being intimate quite early on. It's very much a "ruin all girls because a girl ruined my life" concept and honestly it is not my cup of tea since I'm a girl (lol). But that should not be an issue since your book is already set in the right audience. Writing wise I think it's not bad for someone young. Of course there's also room for improvement. Personally, I think you should proofread them so there would not be any confusion with the readers. All the best!