Not bad, not bad at all. In fact, the plot and pace are both good so far. I like your idea, its creative, as well as how the story is progressing. A small reminder though - maybe divide the paragraphs a bit more will help? The first two to three chapters were a little hard to read, but it got better later on, so I guess thats fine :). Overall, great work.
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