Review Detail of NLinCH in My Animal System
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I love the background and story, sadly it is riddled with so many mistakes, that it is oftentimes too difficult to follow the story. As an example: If you don’t get that the MC has transformed, you can not really imagine the story flow. (Like C7, around 3/4 in) All in all a story with lots of potential moving in the right direction but distubed by orthographic mistakes. Even with only 1 star writing quality, an overall 4.0 star story.
My Animal System
FavourEkele_1969
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Your chapters later on are already better than the beginning ones. Some difficult scene changes, but it’s not impossible anymore to understand.
FavourEkele_1969:Thanks man. I'll edit my story and improve on my writing. 😰