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I'm currently around chapter 40, and so far I have really enjoyed the book. HOWEVER, there is one thing that has been bugging me ever since chapter 1.. the writing style. While I am extremely happy that there aren't many grammatical mistakes (almost none to be honest, which is rare), the author uses far too many simple sentences that it feels like reading a 1st grader's book. "Isaac likes to sing. he enjoys it. Sophia, on the other hand, doesn't. Alice likes her elder brother." Of course, the content of the above example is made up, however, the sentence structure is identical to the story. The author needs to stop having 1 line paragraphs and minimise the use of simple sentences

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