Review Detail of Daoist6SrAyH in I Become Invincible By Signing In

This author ruins any potential his novel had in the first chapter with two bad decisions. First, should not have shown the truth in the first chapter. hint at it, sure, but let us be confused and angry for a while. Second, it was very dumb to introduce a transmigration plot into this. It is not just completely and utterly pointless but also an active detriment to the story because it severs the protagonist from his own past, creating a disconnect between the protag and Wang Yi's emotions, grudges and attachments. With this decision alone he neuters all of the emotional weight that he established at the start. Alternatively, he could have just introduced the system and shoved in some BS about how he was chosen by the system because he is uniquely qualified in some way, perhaps he naturally has an extremely strong soul or something. Regardless, with the two bad decisions he made in the first chapter alone he ruined any potential his novel had in ways that are extremely easy to fix.