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Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommentedCh 1 Prologue- Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented
he has time to talk?
"Ling Chong, I'm flattered you think so highly of me, using advanced martial arts against me!" - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommentedCh 3 Chapter 3 Mountain and River Martial Soul_1
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stupid
However, after Ling Xiao joined the Ling Clan, Ling Yu started to see him in a new light and even took the initiative to get closer and befriend him, which filled Ling Xiao with pride. He was determined to go further in martial arts and make a name for himself within the Ling Clan. - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented
stupid and boring. make him inexperienced. he doesn't want to be in the dungeon, he is scared of monsters and scared of death and intimidated by the hunters, but he's here anyway for X reason and he doesn't have another choice for Y reason. this way he has more room to grow.
Rem didn't look a day older than 14, yet he didn't show any emotion towards the death of the Goblin. - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommentedCh 1 Rem's First Dungeon
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really? that's the best surname you could think of?
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useless exposition
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stupid skill
Looking at the list of five skills, Ling Yi only hesitated for a moment before choosing [Starfall]. - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommentedCh 6 Chapter 6 Explosive News_1
- Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented"Master! You did so well on your first try! You should train more!" Louise's adorable baby face cleansed all the system messages.
- Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommentedWith her by his side, Leon realized just how short she was. While he towered at 190cm, Louise was 155cm at most, and that gap was pretty noticeable. She was much cuter, though!
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??
Leon gazed at her for a while, wiped off some of them, then looked away and stared at the cloudless sky, "Yes, it is." - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented
unnatural and clunky
Leon smiled faintly at her, and as she looked deeply into his eyes, he replied, "Life is what you make it. I'd be honored to help you make it merrier. See, I hate being alone. And I just appeared in this world, so I'll take the lead and invite you to my party. Louise, would you like to adventure with me?" - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented
HP is a stupid concept outside of a game.
[Leon Blade Lv. 1(0/50) HP: 1000/1000 MP: 1000/1000] - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented
unnecessary exposition
Then the orders from above fell upon him, and he whispered... "Not only I can't tell him that the peak humanity's body attracts and accepts the opposite gender of the same quality, but you also want me to personally oversee his test and increase the level. Is he the new kind I'll grow to hate?" - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented
A bit much. Rather than this he should be angry at the cloak man.
Leon hadn't interrupted the black spirit, but he stood with boiling heart: his hands were clenched, his face was scrunched deeply, and he was trembling. Tears streaked down from his left eye while his right remained on the black spirit's hood, seemingly ready to answer him at any moment. - Daoist6SrAyH2mthCommented
Cringe. Have mature women act like mature women, not blushing schoolgirls. It's annoying.
Miss Kim suddenly realized she had been standing silently for too long and she quickly tried to get her composure back. She was acting like a school girl with a silly crush!