90 % of words are over written, an 50 % are un needed and over descriptive , beyond what could be acceptable or fine. Premise was fine then , 2 bit piece of junk writer happened, maybe he cant fill more pages ortherwise. With a work that cant be resumed at 10 pages , like this. And let no begin with plot holes. Puuf
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LIKEJironimo_Ross:at this points I'd say 70% are unneeded, just vapid padding.image
Jironimo_Ross:at this points I'd say 70% are unneeded, just vapid padding.image