I thought they only bordered the Han?

Where did he put the baby when he was a Sparrow?

😂 I love that they've made up, but he still didn't give this back.

Isn't she from a dual cultivation sect?

Thick hair covering her thighs and all the way up to her navel?!? Like fur shorts?!? At first I was hoping for some character art, but now I'm honestly glad there's none for her. I've got nothing to say if a woman chooses to let her leg hair or arm pit hair grow out. But that doesn't make it appealing. And I get that she isn't trying to be appealing, it just makes it difficult to want to imagine the scene you're writing. Like was previously said, bush is one thing, but...

I can understand if a cultivator has kept herself "pure" for over 300 years, but I'll never understand how intelligent, adult women don't understand what arousal is. Has she never been aroused in her entire life? Never heard it described?

Has he transformed from a nose-picking, ear-cleaning slob, into an arrogant attention seeker? Does he ever begin acting like someone who's been alive for over 900 years?

It was etched into memory, though...? If he remembers it well though to write it down, even if it's not "at the forefront" whatever that means, he should still be able to recall it. Isn't that what it means to etch it into his memory? Why write it down, where it could be read by anyone who gets their hands on it? The whole advantage of it being transferred to his mind is that he doesn't need to refer to a scroll all the time. He even mentions that mages were more scholarly than cultivators, so shouldn't his brain be a bit better?

Didn't it say that the Mu clan used potions and herbs to heal and stabilize his cultivation base? Now it's been crippled all this time? If it was crippled how was he using qi to fly using the wings from his robe?

I understand. And as someone that only speaks one language, I certainly won't complain that much. It's a struggle sometimes to walk the line between trying to provide constructive criticism and outright complaining. I've seen you mention a lot about how you've recognized mistakes and corrected as you go forward, and that's a large part of why I keep reading. I hesitated to even mention this, because it might have already been mentioned (which it seems it has), since I'm still catching up with the story. Thanks for being so responsive and for the story writing!

And, yeah, the curtains made it easier to guess, but the last chapter ended with Argon's dragon spirit getting excited and I was like "did his dragon spirit turn into one of those perverted dragon lolis?!?"

That's one crazy club. A private booth was cool enough, but then it even had a bed and they stayed there the whole night. 😂

I keep getting distracted from the story because I keep tripping over the large number of adverbs. My brain is keeping track and it seems strange when there's not a paragraph with at least two. The letters "-ly" feel like they're jumping off the screen and grabbing my attention...

This back and forth without transition is a bit jarring. It wasn't until this paragraph that it became obvious that this was Asher instead of argon. And where are they? Are they still in the private booth at the club?

At least we can skim most of these chapters without reading most of it...

Didn't she just finish saying she didn't have much time before someone else came to check on them? 😓

He obviously didn't have that problem, before, when Huo Yue was straddling his lap...

Fair enough

Poor hygiene and a lack of manners? 😂

He was able to withstand all that bone-breaking pain but hunger makes him groan and stumble? This along with those chicks tripping and falling makes me wonder what's wrong with all these cultivators. Especially since this chick couldn't sense them being that close to her. Sure you could argue that Yang Wei has a higher cultivation, now, but the other guy doesn't...