Review Detail of Eldritch_Umbra in My Killing System

Despite having a promising name and premise, Seraph: The God Of Death is an absolute mess. The writing quality, while not the worst I've read, is not great. There are very few paragraphs in this novel, most of them being a single sentence, a line space and rinse and repeat. The pacing for the story is much too fast, and the characters are introduced far too abruptly. They also leave the story just as fast as they came, making the whole experience feel rushed. The dialogue is clunky, and there are far too many out of place exposition dumps. There is no real background built up for this world, and the whole set up for the first chapter is very strange. Like, the protagonist's mother dies, some god decides to give him superpowers for literally no reason. Why does this death god want Seraph's help in the first place? Heck if I know. Overall, 2.5 or 2.6/5. Not terrible, but the cons outweigh the pros. The story is salvageable. I hope my review helps the story live up to the hype the name builds for it.