Review Detail of PinnacleExistence in Enjoying life in twilight

it's really too early for a review, but I will leave it here because I love the potential of a twilight fanfic, and this one, for a moment, was going in the right direction. the grammar is tragic, understandable, but tragic. in the sense that you notice that it's passable, though disappointing as the small flux was nice. the storyline was fluid, with slight bumps until the end of the meeting with god. when arriving in the world, it was too transition-less(?).. then the waitress in the steakhouse was cheap, with low effort, and meaningless involvement.