Review Detail of goofy_little_man in The Villain's Sword Is Sharp
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First of all, the idea of Anima is inspired by Gu from Reverend Insanity but I've put my own twist on it. Hopefully it's at least a little bit original and you like it. Outside of that, I think the book is quite unique, especially in terms of how the world is and what the main character is like. However, I won't say too much other than that the MC is pure evil. Best parts of the novel: Characters - The main characters all have depth and personality, but it's not just them. Every character has at least some thought behind them, even throwaway characters. That means you won't get scenes where side characters act stupidly for no reason. Quality of writing (I am English, I speak great English, don't expect spelling errors or anything) World building - I've put a lot of effort into creating the continents, thinking about what species live there, what environments there will be and all that good stuff. I'm especially proud of the more that will start to be revealed as the novel goes on. Bad bits: Dialogue - Some conversations may seem a little clunky or stiff. This is the main area of my writing that I'm trying to improve, so hopefully dialogue will become more natural and free-flowing as the novel progresses. Slow(ish) development - The novel isn't a slow starter at all, it begins with 3 high action trials and there are lots of fight scenes after that as well. What I mean is that characters and places will not be developed right away. I will take time with these things and you won't get huge lumps of backstory or information about people, places or things. Changes in writing style - I have written other things before, but this is my first full-length novel, so my writing style will change and develop as the novel progresses. P.S. I would really appreciate comments about which parts of the novel you enjoyed and which bits could be better. These kinds of comments will help me become a better writer, which will in turn make this a better novel. Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoy the book!
The Villain's Sword Is Sharp
goofy_little_man
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Thanks for the feedback, but I don't think I can give a positive answer. Just 1 chapter a day is difficult enough, so I won't increase it to 2 until I can write a lot quicker while maintaining the same quality. As for chapter length, webnovel says my average words / ch is 1.73k, which I don't think is too bad. I know it's contradictory to say this after rejecting one of your suggestions, but please keep commenting potential improvements. If it's something I can do and something I think fits well with the story, I'll do it.
Mauro_Cisternas:You are on a very good path, although I would like you to publish more chapters per day, 2 would be fine, since they are very short
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Just don't forget the original intent of the novel, the hero must be cruel and evil will do anything for strength, I mean whether he kills children or women or the elderly, all that matters are the benefits, of course he doesn't have to be a crazy person his actions must be planned, don't care With things like morals, friendship, clan, love and kindness (these things destroy good novels), by forgetting you can make him betray his team or group for a treasure or a rich location in parallel or the discovery of an ancient heritage, and then slaughter them so that this secret will not be discovered by others, you know The dead do not speak secrets, and so all the benefits will be for him alone, as you know betrayal, theft, hypocrisy, deception and murder are exciting things, they make you give all your effort to create wonderful events
I don't want to spoil anything, but there's no need to worry. The novel will stay steadfastly on course and there will be bits like this.
Master_Of_gu:Just don't forget the original intent of the novel, the hero must be cruel and evil will do anything for strength, I mean whether he kills children or women or the elderly, all that matters are the benefits, of course he doesn't have to be a crazy person his actions must be planned, don't care With things like morals, friendship, clan, love and kindness (these things destroy good novels), by forgetting you can make him betray his team or group for a treasure or a rich location in parallel or the discovery of an ancient heritage, and then slaughter them so that this secret will not be discovered by others, you know The dead do not speak secrets, and so all the benefits will be for him alone, as you know betrayal, theft, hypocrisy, deception and murder are exciting things, they make you give all your effort to create wonderful events
The author I appreciate that you remove the summary of the novel, it is boring, and put something like this comment. Of course, you must improve it. My English is weak. I hope you understand the meaning.: What is good?! What is evil?! Innocent?! the wicked?!? Childish words, I can only use them to reach my goal. This is called selfishness and hypocrisy. Where is the humanity?!? Do you think I care?! Actually I like idiots because they are the easiest to manipulate, but I will not be like them, this is the reality if I want to go up I have to pay the price, but I don't care as long as the price is not my life, simply making the lives of others the price of my ambition
