Review Detail of Akira_Monadelle in Irene The Lady Who Turned Down Fate

This is actually quite good for your first novel. The story has a very solid plot and the storyline is very interesting even though it's a bit common. I admire how unique you made it. However, the story lacks a proper flow, especially at the beginning but as the chapters progress the flow improves. The synopsis and the first chapter greatly confused me, I literally had no idea what was going on at the beginning of chapter 1. The novel is also unfortunately plagued by grammatical and punctuation errors that made my understanding of the novel even harder. There were multiple run-on sentences and improper uses of full stops and commas. Overall, the novel has a very good plot and the intentions of the writer were clear but the errors and the flow makes it very confusing. This was my honest review, I hope that as you write you can only get better and better. [img=recommend]