Hello, I am the editor of this story ( IsUnavailable#4173 on discord) and, though I may be a little biased, this is one of my favorite stories on here. This story is a refreshing read after all the 'system', 'isekai', and 'reborn' stories on here. It stands out from the crowd and has interesting characters that can draw you in. Going over the five points: Writing Quality: as the editor I am (again) biased here, but I do my best to make sure this is as cleaned as possible and get rid of grammar errors and misused pronouns. Story development: The plot has a good pacing without stalling too long at the beginning with info. dumps or speeding along too fast and not properly fleshing out the story. All in all no complaints here. Character designs: Like I said before there are several interesting characters. The author does use some anime style tropes, but he makes sure the characters aren't just one note and have more to them with real motivations and backgrounds. I particularly like the main characters mother for her novel and interesting personality. Updating stability: The author and I strive to have a chapter a day release schedule so barring any illness or accident you will always have something new to read each day. (schedule changes are almost always mentioned in author notes or on the discord) World background: This story is mainly set in America and uses western style Vampires (and other paranormal creatures). This is a wonderful break from the predominantly eastern influenced stories on webnovel and the author does a great job at slowly revealing this new and interesting paranormal world as we learn about it through the eyes of the main character. To sum everything up, this is a refreshing and interesting read. Clean chapters with minimal errors (your welcome) and good update pacing. Definitely worth your time to at least give it a try. So, what are you waiting for? Go ahead and get reading.
Victor_Weismann
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LIKEMen, I like this story ... My personality doesn't like every book or story, so if I read the first page and it's interesting, I know its good story, and I have high expectations that few will exceed, but this story just blew my mind ... 💜 I read these 150 chapters in about 3 days, but I had trouble quitting this application and don't let yourself be ruined by the thoughts of the next chapter. Good job, author, go ahead, I need to know how this story will end 👍👍👍 ...
MC is possessive of his women (almost like yandere-ish), and yes, they do have *ex in later chapters.
Astral_Trinity_2449:I want to ask whether mc is a simp or not and do the women even have *ex with him
its a harem but this is the only harem i have ever actually enjoyed bc usually harems destroy the story
Enlightened_Idiot:is this Harem? 🤔
Lacrosse_Hammy:its a harem but this is the only harem i have ever actually enjoyed bc usually harems destroy the story
Please start cleaning all the misusages of tense. First-person perspective uses past-tense when describing actions and states of being (emotions, sensations, etc.), just as is done with third-person. It feels weird reading something being narrated in first-person and it constantly switches tense. I haven't gotten all the way to the 200s, but at least in the early chapters it occurs enough that I have to actively change the tense as I read.