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I really didn't like mc he say he wants to lay low but in the end he is stand up like sore thumb just being loser to most people, incompetent to his teacher, and mysterious to 1 heroine. don't forget how he seems see other people other than significant character at his "story" is worthless in his eyes (him being friendless), how he see world as if he is God who is doing babysitting his story so the said story stay at the same how he "creat" it. story wise it's so slow to my taste and too many info dump.
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Bit sad you feel that way, but well, can't satisfy everyone. I want to address a few things. 'seems to see other people other than a significant character at his story worthless' That's simply not true. There are reasons why he is friendless. Bit of a spoiler since I wanted to delve more deeply into it for character development, but here's why. 1. They will most likely die due to some events happening in the story (and because of waht happened with is parents when young, he can't really cope with loss of people he cares about) 2. (Spoiler) insecurity about this world being not real and all part of his imagination. What if someday he wakes up in a hospital and everything was fake? What if all the relationships he built are fake? These are his thought processes. He isn't unfriendly cus he doesn't value anyone else, his thought process is much deeper than that. Yes MC wants to keep the storyline the same. It is made evident from the very first chapter it will be this way. He won't take all of the cheat items for himself, I already explained why to you before. Sorry if you wanted a story about an MC who irresponsibly takes away all of the cheat items without any regard to what his actions will bring. Also, although he doesn't want the plotline to change, that doesn't mean he won't mind a few things changing. As long as it doesn't effect hte general course of the events of the story. That's why he took a couple of cheat items. He wants a general control over future events. He just doesn't want to go into a fight blindly without any preparations. You can say he is the cautious type. Regarding laying low : I think you are misunderstanding something about laying low. He is laying low NOT in terms of attention but in terms of power. He doesn't care about what others think of him. He is trying to keep his power hidden for when situations call for it and opponents underestimate him. I think I should've made this more clear. Regarding the pace of the novel. This novel won't go any further than 300-500 chapters, or so. Maybe slow now, but that's because MC is trying to integrate himself to the world. I'm not gonna do time skips this early in the novel. Regarding info dumps. Yeah, that's on me. I did get this feedback before and tried to change it, but me not being a professional writer, I can't really know where I am going wrong. It'd be awesome if you readers could point it out in chapters so that I can fix it. Anyhow, thanks for the review. I explained things from my point of view. You are free to disagree as that is your right.
But how did the middle age author who hesitate about killing suddenly became highly intelligent manipulator who could predict everything like god?
Entrail_JI:Bit sad you feel that way, but well, can't satisfy everyone. I want to address a few things. 'seems to see other people other than a significant character at his story worthless' That's simply not true. There are reasons why he is friendless. Bit of a spoiler since I wanted to delve more deeply into it for character development, but here's why. 1. They will most likely die due to some events happening in the story (and because of waht happened with is parents when young, he can't really cope with loss of people he cares about) 2. (Spoiler) insecurity about this world being not real and all part of his imagination. What if someday he wakes up in a hospital and everything was fake? What if all the relationships he built are fake? These are his thought processes. He isn't unfriendly cus he doesn't value anyone else, his thought process is much deeper than that. Yes MC wants to keep the storyline the same. It is made evident from the very first chapter it will be this way. He won't take all of the cheat items for himself, I already explained why to you before. Sorry if you wanted a story about an MC who irresponsibly takes away all of the cheat items without any regard to what his actions will bring. Also, although he doesn't want the plotline to change, that doesn't mean he won't mind a few things changing. As long as it doesn't effect hte general course of the events of the story. That's why he took a couple of cheat items. He wants a general control over future events. He just doesn't want to go into a fight blindly without any preparations. You can say he is the cautious type. Regarding laying low : I think you are misunderstanding something about laying low. He is laying low NOT in terms of attention but in terms of power. He doesn't care about what others think of him. He is trying to keep his power hidden for when situations call for it and opponents underestimate him. I think I should've made this more clear. Regarding the pace of the novel. This novel won't go any further than 300-500 chapters, or so. Maybe slow now, but that's because MC is trying to integrate himself to the world. I'm not gonna do time skips this early in the novel. Regarding info dumps. Yeah, that's on me. I did get this feedback before and tried to change it, but me not being a professional writer, I can't really know where I am going wrong. It'd be awesome if you readers could point it out in chapters so that I can fix it. Anyhow, thanks for the review. I explained things from my point of view. You are free to disagree as that is your right.
1. He can predict most of the stuff since its the world that he created. 2. How does killing and manipulation correlate? you don't have to kill to manipulate people.
ForFunWorld:But how did the middle age author who hesitate about killing suddenly became highly intelligent manipulator who could predict everything like god?
Rather then say he created this world its better to say he wrote this story. Ah don't mind me, maybe its just me.
Entrail_JI:1. He can predict most of the stuff since its the world that he created. 2. How does killing and manipulation correlate? you don't have to kill to manipulate people.